Architectural Designs

Does this sentence make sense?

Additionally, the area will be useful for faster communication between engineers and draftspersons because it is located adjacent to the Engineering Department. This reduces the time of walking up/down the stairs to communicate with them. I think the last part is messed up. How can I correct it?

Public Comments

1. maybe it does but i just don't get it!
2. This reduces the time needed to walk up and down the stairs in order to communicate with them.
3. im guessing this is your home work, im not doing it for you
4. I think it makes sense! Its good :)
5. This reduces the time of walking up/down the stairs to communicate with them. This will reduce the amount of time spent walking up and down the stairs to communicate with others. or instead of others put the engineering department
6. This reduces the time of walking up and/or down the stairs to communicate with them.
7. The new proximity between the draftspersons and engineering departments will enable swifter communication between them.
8. Because of this the walking up/down the stairs to discuss anything with them is greatly reduced
9. Additionally, the area will be useful for faster communication between engineers and draftspersons because it is located adjacent to the Engineering Department. This increases productivity, because less time is taken out of work to cheese? God, I just don't know.. If i weren't sleepy, I'd probably have something amazingly college english major going on all over this little board, but alas, i'm retarded...
10. i'm afraid the last sentence does not make any sense. who is the 'them' you are pertaining to? how does it reduce the time of walking up and down? you can correct it by answering those questions and being more clear with "communication" and the nouns.
11. The area will allow faster communication between engineers and drafting people because it is located adjacent to the Engineering Department and thus there is no need to walk up/down the stairs.
12. Additionally, the area will be useful for faster communication between engineers and draftspersons because it is located adjacent to the Engineering Department, Thus, reducing the time of walking up/down the stairs to communicate with them.
13. Additionally, the area will be used for faster communication between engineers and draftsperson because it is located adjacent to the engineering department. This results in reduction of traveling and saves time.
14. The way its phrased makes it seem a bit awkward. Here's my bit: "Additionally, the area will contribute faster communication between engineers and draftspersons. The adjacent location to the Engineering Department eliminates heavy consumption of travel time to their offices." Always state the clear and precise point in the first sentence, then follow with details and reasoning behind it. Makes it an easier read. Also, try to use words like "contribute" instead of "useful" if your writing an arguement for your point. A bloody broom is useful but it within itself isn't a "contribution" to an entire building....see what I mean?....don't lie....but don't hide it either!
15. Efficiency of ambulatory ascent/descent for inter-departmental communication will improve.
16. Additionally, the area will be useful for faster communication between engineers and draftsmen because it is located adjacent to the Engineering Department. This would reduce the time of walking up and down the stairs to meet/communicate with them.
17. you could say: this, essentially, will reduce the time taken....(the rest is fine) if you can't figure out who is wasting time on the stairs from reading the last sentence then its probably short term memory loss. you don't want to be redundant and pompous
18. I think the second sentence is unnecessary. Of course communication will be faster with the two departments adjacent to one another. You could try amending the first sentence to emphasize the proximity of the two departments: Additionally, the location of the Drawing Office adjacent to the Engineering Department will allow [permit / afford / provide for] faster communication between engineers and draftspersons.