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can anyone help with my cover letter for a job. anything i should add?

Dear person name: This letter is to express my interest in the full time or part time CADD operator/draftsperson position posted on Criagslist.org. The opportunity presented in this listing is very appealing, and I believe that I would an asset to your program. This internship would provide me with the ideal opportunity to assist at your organization and to expand my research skills. The key strengths that I possess for success in this position include, but are not limited to, the following: •I have successfully designed, and developed drafting projects using drafting application as well as providing live support •I am a self-starter. •Eager to learn new things. •Strive for continued excellence. Provide exceptional contributions to customer service for all customers. Please see my resume for additional information on my experience. I can be reached anytime via my cell phone,number. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to speaking with you about this employment opportunity. Sincerely, My name

Public Comments

1. Looks good - I am assuming you covered everything listed in the want ad.
2. Use words from the advertisement in your letter. Cut and paste if you have to, but include key terms from the advertisement in your cover letter and in your main statement of your resume. send it to shawn.shaulis@yahoo.com and I will critique it.
3. What are the requirements and qualifications of the position. Tailor your letter to that.
4. It's always a good idea to demonstrate your knowledge about the company you are applying for: some specific statement about a previous project which the company completed. This shows that: a) you've done your homework b) you're not just papering the city with boilerplate applications. Good luck.
5. Cover letter should be addressed to the person concerned. It should be tailored to employer needs, Just mention enough to have employer read through your resume. Be true. Do not come across you know everything. But on the other hand put your best foot forward within your capabilities. Just remember every company has his own ways for doing things. So, you just need to have fundamentals.
6. It sounds great to me and the added resume will more than likely answer any other questions they might have. Good Luck!
7. Change "Eager to learn new things" with "I am eager...". Likewise with "Strive for continued excellence" with "I strive for continued excellence". You'll want to be consistent in your use of related phrases. If you use a grammatical form in a list, use the same form throughout it.
8. leave 2 spaces btwn sincerely and your name and your spose 2 sign ur name in the middle. u kan say "To Whom It May Concern:" nstd of a person, period after the 1st bulletin, leave ur cell number in parenthesis next to the word number,
9. Please correct this sentence. The opportunity presented in this listing is very appealing, and I believe that I would "be" an asset to your program.
10. Is craigslist spelled right? Is "provide exceptional contributions" supposed to have a bullet? You've got some extraneous commas. As to the meat: "I am very interested in the full time or part time." Your first sentence starts with a half-dozen extra words. Delete "The opportunity" through "appealing" as being extra words. Delete "but are not limited to." You need to personalize the letter! Tell person name you're a student, a recent grad, etc. Brag briefly on your academic record. Tell him that your resume shows you have experience with [whatever you have experience with.] Finally, suggest that you will be happy to come in for a personal interview and that you will furnish personal/academic/professional references upon request. If you get the interview, take a sheet with you that has the names & contact info of your three best references.
11. Noticed a couple of typos and other things: "and I believe that I would BE an asset" No comma is needed after "I have successfully designed" Try to be a little more specific about the "drafting application" that you used if you can You used two different tenses in your first key strength..I would rephrase it to sound something like this: "I have successfully designed and developed drafting projects using "insert drafting program," and have provided live support." I would also change "provide exceptional contributions" to just "I provide excellent customer service to all customers" No comma is needed after "via my cell phone" Make sure to follow up in about 5-7 days by calling if you have their number. Good luck!! :)