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What do you think of my Story... Twilight Saga knock-off. Other writers please read.?

P.S... i do not intend on getting this story published. i am writing it solely for my personal pleasure. ps... i know that no one is likely to do this, but PLEASE don't steal my story. thank you again. :)

Public Comments

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Well, I generally despise Twilight knockoffs as a whole, but the one thing I liked about this is the Illario chapters. They were somewhat well-written. Other than that, though...a Twilight knockoff is NOT going to do well in today's market... Lay off the thumbs down button, people. I gave her a compliment! I really did! See? *points to compliment*
it was GREAT. Sadly, not original, but very well writen. Would you please e-mail me anymore drafts of the story. thanks. grantaterie@yahoo.com
i thought it was a good story. the only thing wrong with it was some punctuational errors...sorry, i'm just a freak about that. i can seriously find a punctuation problem anywhere! but other than that, it was a cool story! it was sort of like twilight, but not SO MUCH that i was like, "oh my gosh, what did this girl do? go through twilight and just re-write everything but using different names?" some people do that, and it really bothers me! anyway, it was a nice little story line, and i enjoyed it! :]
That was a very intriguing knockoff. I truly love your style of writing. The Ilario chapters are very much like Midnight Sun and Edward's point of view. There are some typos in the writing, but that can be easily fixed. Keep going. But, try to make it more of your own. I like how you've taken many different ideas about vampires and mashed them into one story. It reminds me of Twilight and the tv show Moonlight. I hope to read the rest of this story sometime.
Great job, I really enjoyed it. You did a great job with the dialogue. You should really submit it to http://www.papertank.com and see what they think. I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!