Architectural Designs

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Hi, i was wondering if you would be willing to help proofread/rearrange my paper to make it better? Thanks Throughout history, one thing that always manages to catch my eye is the design theme of each society. I find it very interesting how if you jump from society to society you can see a distinct different in their architectural design. Naturally, when I was flipping through chapters 8-13 I noticed the different architectural designs and decided that I had to comment on the uniqueness of each style of architecture. Starting with Islamic mosques, the first thing I noticed were the arches. The Islamic used several types of arches. These types included the horseshoe, pointed and muqarnas arch. The muqarnas arch were unique to Islam and builders started using this design more and more as the designs became more beautiful to look at. Mosques were also laid out in several different ways, one of which is called a centrally planned mosque which were influenced by Byzantine churches. This design included large open spaces without support beams capped with a dome overhead. Overall I would have to say Islamic architecture is very pretty, especially when there’s a dome on top. To me it seems like the dome caps off the whole structure based on the The Great Mosque on page 290. When we move on to architecture of South and Southeast Asian before 1200, we see a total different style compared to the Islamic architecture. At first glance, I was in awe looking at the pictures in the book of these structures, partically the one on page 321 of the East Torana of the Great Stupa at Sanchi. I was most impressed by the attention to detail on the carvings on the gate. Overall South and Southeast Asian architecture is so different and unique compared to any of the other type of architecture I have seen in this book to date. Another great example is the Rajarajeshvara Temple to Shiva on page 335. Just looking at the temple I’m amazed especially when I look at the size of the people entering on the stairs; it just attests to the sure size of the temple. Temples like these usually have a capstone on top. It was also common for architecture from this time to include a dome or towers called shikharas and vimanas. Chinese and Korean art before 1279 is very interesting. It consists of many different themes depending on what part of asia it was located in. In Indian they had stupas, which were building outwards with massive tops as a top piece. When we move on to architecture from central asia, china, northwestern china and japan we can notice that the new theme is to built upwards. Central asian stupas were build with domes over the top like the stupas in Indian. Watchtoweers in china were build exteremly skinny and tall. Stone pagodas or northewestern china were build with 3 teirs while wooden pagodas of japan were built with many levels. Japanese architecture before 1392 is absolutely amazing to look at. Phoenix Hall on p. 384 is an great example of this. Its built next to the water with vast openings and huge rooftops. Their design themes were influenced by the early Koreans and Chineses. Usually buildings would be built next to each other to form a complex. Each complex typically included the pagoda, main and lecture hall, bell tower, repository for sutras, dormitory and dining hall. Most of the worshiping would happen in the main hall while the lecture hall was used at study areas. One thing that I read online while researching Japanese architecture was how the Shinto rebuilt building around every 20 years with an exact replica of what was built before. I was curious to why they would do this but found no answers in my additional research. I think it might have been just to keep buildings nice and refreshed although I’m not sure if the time to rebuild the building would be worth the reward. The architecture of the Americas before 1300 was very different depending on the location. My favorite piece of architecture would be the Temple of the Feathered Serpent on page 401. What I really like about this is the choice of design for the outside. It’s so unique and interesting to look at. Whenever I stare at this piece I always wonder what the designer was thinking about when he chose this design. A big society of the Americas before 1300 was the Mayan. The Mayan built many different structures but they all have a few things in common. Most Maya building consists of steps, their usually very wide and steep. For temples there usually are two chambers inside the buildings, one behind the other. As far as architecture of ancient Africa there are not many examples in the book. One of the few examples can be found on page 434 which shows the Great Friday Mosque. At first I had to do a double take because I didn’t believe this was real. The whole design with the sticks pointing out of it and all the points on the tops of the walls make this mosque look like something I’d build on the beach. My sources for this paper inc

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1. First you need to run a spell check. It is full of mistakes! Also, far too much subjective opinion such as "very pretty“ and "absolutely amazing".
2. "I" is used far too often. The correct number of "I" instances is zero for this kind of paper. There isn't enough detail to hold interest. Right now it's at the "Here are my vacation photos" level. Try creating an outline and then flesh it out. Example: Architecture type: - Appearance/description - Use - Comparison to others - Origin Make each section follow the same pattern for easy reading. Correct the spelling. "influenced by the early Koreans and Chineses" -- Chineses isn't a word, Using plurals looks odd. Try "influenced by the early Korean and Chinese XXX style architecture it consists of YYY. The page references to the pictures don't add anything. If you must do this (e.g. you can't put the pictures in), then make them footnotes. There needs to be more substance. Example: "The architecture of the Americas before 1300 was very different depending on the location." --- Different than what? What was different about it? Why was it different? When did the change(s) occur? Who was doing the changes? How were the changes accomplished? Was there an advance in technology that caused the change, a new religious belief, economic conditions, population change? And you didn't look deep enough for this: "One thing that I read online while researching Japanese architecture was how the Shinto rebuilt building around every 20 years with an exact replica of what was built before. I was curious to why they would do this but found no answers in my additional research." These buildings house important Kami. Over time they become contaminated with negative thoughts and emotions (demons and evil spirits, if you want to think in anthromorphic terms) by the people using them to worship. After a period of time they accumulate so much negativity that ritual purification isn't enough to insure the proper cleanliness so that the Kami will continue to abide. Therefore the buildings are rebuilt. By using a twenty year cycle Shintoists also insure that every generation will have a chance to show respect for the Kami. Note that Shinto is not like Western religions. There is no concept of going to church every Sunday, it's about how you live your life. This URL from Ise Jingu says the same thing only a bit differently: http://www.isejingu.or.jp/shosai/english/sikinen/sikinen.htm